Kerri+Sullivan+and+Juliana+Dellamarggio

Name of Evaluator: Kerri Sullivan, Juliana Dellamarggio Score:26/35

Introduction: 4.5/5 points 5: Intro provides an overview of the upcoming analysis, including what school/district/community is being analyzed, what aspects are being analyzed, and whom the report is intended to inform. 4: Intro names the school/district/community and previews the scope of the report, but does not describe whom the report is intended to inform. 3: Intro names the school/district/community but not much else. 2: Intro fails to name the school, district, and/or community. 0: No introduction section is apparent.

Comments on report's introduction:
 * Fix picture to word ratio/make sure picture does not split up the introduction
 * Fix spacing between "readiness" and "According"
 * Put your name at the top instead of under "Community Background "

Organization: 4/5 points 5: Report includes the following sections: Introduction, Community, District, School, Conclusion, References. 4: Report includes all sections but does not break information into paragraphs, has few transitions, or is otherwise lacking in coherence. 3: Report is missing one section. 2: Report is not divided into sections but contains some information on each. 1: Report is missing two or more sections.

Comments on report's organization:


 * "community background " instead of "district background"

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">Mechanics: 4/5 points <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">5. All information is cited using APA in-text citations. A properly formatted References section appears at the end of the report. Consistent voice. Sophisticated and varied sentence structure. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">There are few typos or errors in spelling, grammar, or syntax. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">4: Most information is cited and referenced using APA format. There are some errors in spelling, grammar, or syntax but they do not interfere with meaning. Consistent voice. Sentence structure is varied and sophisticated for the most part. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">3: Some information is not cited or referenced. APA format not followed or followed incorrectly. There are some errors in spelling, grammar, or syntax that interfere with meaning. Mostly consistent voice. Somewhat simplistic sentence structure. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">2: Most of the information is not cited. APA formatting is negligible or nonexistent. Multiple errors in spelling, grammar, or syntax interfere with meaning. Inconsistent voice. Simplistic sentence structure. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">0: No citations. No references. Myriad errors in spelling, grammar, or syntax make the report a chore to read. Inconsistent voice. Simplistic sentence structure.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">Comments on report’s mechanics/conventions:

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">Creativity:4.5 /5 <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">5. Report is engaging and colorful. Charts, graphs, and images add professionalism and interest and are well integrated into the report. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">4: Report contains some interesting sections. Charts, graphs and images are relevant and add interest to the report. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">3:. Information is reported in a disengaged manner. Charts, graphs, and images add little to the report.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">Comments on report's creativity: need more pictures:)

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">Conclusion: 3/5 <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">5: Conclusion reviews analysis of school, district and community and describes why findings should be important to reader. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">4: Conclusion reviews analysis of school, district and community <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">3: Conclusion does not report back to report's findings. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">1: Conclusion simply praises or condemns the school. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">0: No conclusion.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">Comments on report's conclusion:


 * Fix "They strengths"

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">Data/Analysis: 6/10

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">5: Report includes at least ten different facts in each section (school, community, district) and compares each figure with another relevant figure. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">4: Report includes at least eight different facts in each section and compares most figures with relevant figures. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">3: Report includes at least six different facts in each section and compares some figures to other relevant figures. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">2: Report includes at least four different facts in each section and compares some figures to other relevant figures. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">0: Report includes less than four different facts for any section or fails to compare any figures with other relevant figures

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 15.6px;">Comments on data/analysis/General comments:


 * Did not summarize findings in graphs to other schools in last section
 * Did not compare last data in school analysis
 * Only five facts in district backrgound